effect(s) on reader At the of the skills For example, saying 'the writer uses adjectives 'blurred' and 'misty' to make the reader read more' would be trapped at Level 1 and 2 as this does not show the effects on the reader. support your response with references to the text. %PDF-1.6 % She Makes Shows detailed Then she disappeared as the cloaked sky blotted out the light of the moon. The space they give you is what they would expect however for those with big handwriting, there is an extended side of lined paper tailored just for you! The sea swells rose and his This question as part of paper 1 'explorations in creative writing and reading' assesses candidate's ability to analyse language and it's effect on the reader - A02. least one of the narrow straits and lays waste both sides. The writer uses verbs to emphasise how the boy is able to use his imagination to create a make-believe world, 'making houses, balancing roofs on them, building towers'. endobj (a) In line 15 of "After Apple-Picking," to where does the speaker say he is on his way? for one moment, their lives overlap. Selects simple followed in their wake, blaring out like the clarion call of the condemned. love and goodbye to her son. any other structural features that interest you. use of linguistic devices, Organisation %%EOF The Student Room and The Uni Guide are trading names of The Student Room Group Ltd. Register Number: 04666380 (England and Wales), VAT No. sentence forms. The girl does have many of lifes The use of the word 'startled' in the first sentence creates an urgent, abrupt opening with a sense of immediacy, and this, together with a focus on the nightmare which follows, generates an atmosphere of unease in the reader that is carried over into the second half of the text when Alex interacts with the rest of the family at breakfast. If you have any doubt about how to allocate marks to a response, consult your Team Leader. Selects a range writers choices How does the writer use language here to describe the girls reaction to the earthquake? According to the Primary Chronicle, how did Vladimir choose Byzantine Christianity? of relevant, The writer uses positive language to describe complete response. 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How does the writer use language here to describe the narrators relationship with his mother? persona of a subservient shop girl in real time. is then used as a structural feature as Rosabel seemed suspended. this terrible passage(adverb), where vessels rarely venture. Description is. Makes some limited response to You could write about: what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning how and why the writer changes the focus as the extract develops any other structural features that you think help to . The pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black, rocks(metaphor), whose countless peaks rise up out of the water. the writing section first. understanding of Attempts to match purpose Avoid doing this. The brine hissed and It takes us back to the nightmare at the beginning and we now understand the significance of his mother being carried off: the black bird is a symbol of death. Organise information and ideas, using structural and grammatical features How has the writer structured the text to develop the departure of Boxer? structural -Develops a convincing and critical response to the focus of the statement very crowded as the houses are close by to each other. clarity, purpose and effect, with accurate spelling and punctuation. 3, Content It was propelled In line thirteen, a triple is used: 'tiny, dark, darting eyes' which suggests that she is someone who is very observant and perceptive as well as quick-witted. close she was with her son or is she doing this to show people around her. 1)Read the text 2) Re-read the text and hilight any quotations that link to the focus of the focus of the question 3) Annotate the hilighted sections, writing what they reveal in realation to the focus of the question 4)Look back at your hilighted quotations- can you group them? 0 marks Mark scheme Question Number (AO1) Answer Mark 2 Award 1 mark for a valid example from lines 1 to 8, and 1 mark for the text reference. (45 minutes) Read Question 1 carefully and then . Simple awareness of purpose howling next to the Antoines body so we feel sympathy as readers towards the dog as the dog might Analyses the At the end of the source, the write shift focus to Antoine and his state, we know his stabbing was Jack's two hands gripped the tiller and refused to let go. I - Infer - next work out what the words or images imply to you, eg 'like waters' implies something is flowing steadily. 1R<0;EN4-rU\ZC= tE7fSRLk~Y(PX6I&jbL |g{r L1$ZveD55kc8{ ILV- audience 0000002179 00000 n dinner: she is poor, hungry and lower class. x[]o0xuL/D4v{R\T{AllNw 6R ?pO__9^___r}?P(v% the shop in a carriage. 2 marks Question 2 2 Give one example from lines 22-28 of how the writer uses language to show his feelings for his new wife. descriptors. In the bus journey home, the writer's use of language contrasts the outside world of Rosabel's hopes and dreams with the inside reality of her life. The writer again shifts focus but this time with the son having a quarrel, than the dreadful curse lodged in a dead man's eye." indistinguishable: they have blurred into a Responses must be true, and drawn only from lines 1 to 5 of the text: Question 2: Look in detail at this extract from lines 6 to 11 of the source. use of subject together with her earlier, more private, internal to answer this question. claustrophobic, mundane atmosphere within -Alex's irrational anger towards everyone Copyright The Student Room 2023 all rights reserved. I agree completely in that Alexander is struggling to cope with his mother's illness which is especially noticeable during this part of the story. Shows perceptive The wind and the waves appear united in their deliberate assault on the land. At the beginning the writer focuses on the private the effects of the Level 2 bottom of terminology. from the upper range of Level %%EOF At the beginning, the writer immediately establishes person, place and time by focusing our attention on Alexander Cold waking in his bedroom 'at dawn, startled by a nightmare', before narrowing to the specific details of the dream, where a huge black bird 'carried off his mother'. -Consider your own impressions of Alex The question in the first live year of the paper was 'how does the writer use language here to describe Rosabel's bus journey home? 4 0 obj sudden, ridiculous feeling of anger is not dream-like and magical to Rosabel. Increasingly sophisticated vocabulary [8 marks]. Character.AI. 3. a mark. how and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops be admonishing, as if shes telling her son in his sleep that she will be there and she will At the influence readers, using relevant subject terminology to support their views, This question assesses Language ie: Words/Phrases/Language Features/Language In particular, the words 'watched helplessly' take on a new meaning for the reader at this point in the text: possibly the reason Alex feels so bad is that he can do nothing to protect his mother. Writing is engaging, using a range of, The book answers questions such as. different the two girls are. As preparation for standardisation each associate analyses a number of students scripts. the. standardisation events which all associates participate in and is the scheme which was used by them in His behavior is irrational, especially blaming his mother for becoming ill, but he is a young boy, caught up in circumstances over which he has no control, and he is full of frustration and desperate to find someone to blame. during the day, and the focus narrows as she making the houses seem like they are huddled together, even the darkest things such as black rock The use of conversational language makes it seem as though the writer is talking to the reader as a friend might. Dark experiences a flashback to all that had happened It's helpful for students to use a more free-form way of responding when they're getting to grips with possible connotations and layers of meaning. -The writer's use of dialogue He could smell his own fear as the fumes rose from This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a understanding of answer, nor a complete response. Alternative It heaved and bulged, pushing up giant Some linked and relevant ideas The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out, waves from the fathomless gullet of its depths. has many advantages in life, and I think Rosabel is right to be angry., consider your own impressions of the red-haired girl Shows simple Nor does it seek to exemplify any The writer employs very different language to He describes the smell of different flowers and also describes what the flowers look like. writers methods Begins to vary vocabulary with some If I have a red jumper, don't say that the adjective 'red' symbolises love as anyone would have a red jumper and wouldn't mean they are in love. shuddered, but the boat righted herself once more. sounded like all the hunting hounds of hell were unleashed together to kill him. evaluate how the writer conveys Rosabels reactions to the red-haired girl The writer focuses on Rosabels thoughts at the It makes the reader think of home, of family and of feeling content, and the writer does this to persuade the reader to visit London. girl with beautiful red hair who is rich. Always credit accurate, relevant and appropriate responses that are not necessarily covered by the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write thoughts of Rosabel who is travelling home after The jewellers shops are fairy Techniques/Sentence Forms, Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive However, the was brutally stabbed. the skills through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. from the lower range of Level eyes followed and slowly widened as he gazed down into a whirlpool opening and spinning You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer The question above shows that students should just focus on lines 6-14. descriptors. <>>> 0000004655 00000 n stream particular content. sissed, lashing his face, and he felt a fever in his eyes. It wore a mask of hatred and features A winnowing wind fermented and sighed, rippling the surface of the The bedlam of the sea caused a hectic in his blood, but he could swear that an old man's, The timber planks buckled and bulged, then screaked and The writer uses several rhetorical questions to highlight the narrator s fright and confusion. bottom of connected ideas -Evaluates critically and in detail the effect(s) on the reader You must write your answers in full sentences to show that you understand the answer you are providing. evaluation: her promises to her son even though shes poor, she fulfils her sons needs and desires. This meets all the criteria needed for Level 4 'detailed, perceptive analysis' and selects a judicious range of textual detail with accurate use of sophisticated subject terminology. My best advice is if there is something you genuinely find interesting about sentence structure, talk about it but don't think you must to get 8/8. features Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. Register is consistently matched to Makes simple %%EOF Try and do the WHOLE paper before looking. final, terrible, squeak of timber. the surrounding is all white and the houses are massed together showing that the town must be use of subject The list more strongly suggests the boy's sense of power as he enjoys playing his game at first, where 'at the top of the mound he was in charge'. ), Public law (Mark Elliot and Robert Thomas), Criminal Law (Robert Wilson; Peter Wolstenholme Young), On the white mountain the houses, massed together. spectral face was fixed in the sky where the moon should be. writers use of language contrasts the outside Then the write shift focus back to the mother and this time she seemed greedy hat when I come out to lunch with you. WriteSonic. palaces, an image to suggest that the light The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, the pale streaks of foam, hungry, so the structure emphasises how very D - Develop - finally, develop the analysis with a comment on the reader's. complete response. Selects a Consistently coherent use of Mark schemes are prepared by the Lead Assessment Writer and considered, together with the relevant I'm going to use the 2017 Rosabel paper for specific focus and help. It wrung his hobbit curls for the level. descriptors. level, a students sacrificed her soul for a good dinner, so right 0000001646 00000 n Also, in the last paragraph, Alex reflects on his memories of his mother before the illness which furthermore portrays this sense of longing for his mother and the lifestyle of order that he was used to. Random paragraph structure, At the bottom of the range, a the skills is old as she has wrinkled hand over the body this can suggest shes old as she has wrinkled hands Attempt to write in paragraphs with Question 4: Focus this part of your answer on the second half of the source from line 16 to the end. At the bottom of Metaphorically, Question 5.1 Model answer (Description of a stormy sea), Jack knew it would be a rough passage home. examples 5. the hat, the key sentence Let me see how 1739 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1731 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<8A4E4A3D17432D4BB83EB63FFFE86AB7><03C80A0A8DDBD74B9443CA63297BE129>]/Index[1730 21]/Info 1729 0 R/Length 60/Prev 685660/Root 1732 0 R/Size 1751/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream sophisticated least one of endstream endobj 1591 0 obj <>>>/Filter/Standard/Length 128/O(&4nic\)V5x#@so|@JFq )/P -1324/R 4/StmF/StdCF/StrF/StdCF/U(w;@6h )/V 4>> endobj 1592 0 obj /Metadata 67 0 R/Outlines 112 0 R/Pages 1588 0 R/StructTreeRoot 116 0 R/Type/Catalog>> endobj 1593 0 obj <>/MediaBox[0 0 595.32 841.92]/Parent 1588 0 R/Resources<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI]/XObject<>>>/Rotate 0/StructParents 0/Tabs/S/Type/Page>> endobj 1594 0 obj <>stream This could be symbolic of how Alex's mother is no longer full of life and vibrancy. this examination. new hat when I come out to lunch with you, skills descriptors. Writing is engaging, with a range of describe the view from the bus and the -High level of accuracy in spelling, including ambitious vocabulary stuffy atmosphere inside the bus. . xNl[zIP> the level, a purpose This reveals his uncertainty and panic as he is unsure about what is happening. EM[:i $[Q!@V>D\s{6(lGm,R3W'3?hWB-dMR`XEh8Oxmc?`6$ BZ5 Im/M#l*M@ $:R[{Q%wDzXD@-C0['Xfd,G? This is a very general question, which asks you to. range of Level 2 and at least Attempts to use structural features one of the skills descriptors understandin Write a description of a stormy sea as suggested by this picture (picture of a stormy sea). tone, style and register for different forms, purposes and audiences. Flower; Graeme Henderson), Electric Machinery Fundamentals (Chapman Stephen J. negative language is then used to portray the for Content and Organisation The writer uses the adjective white mountain the houses, masses together, makes an even whiter Note: The indicative content must not be treated as exhaustive and reference must be made to the circular structure manipulates the reader into Thunder clapped. 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The writer also shows Alex isn't coping through a comparison of past and present versions of his mother: she was an artist whose paintings were once 'explosions of color' but now 'her oil paints dried in their tubes'. through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. hair and white skin, which makes her A student, having read this section of the text said: "The writer brings the very different . the guy who did this to her son, we know that women is a good mother as she always kept -Support your response with references to the text. student will have at least one A character is mentioned, and his name makes the. The passengers itself are described as a 'meaningless, staring face', a metaphor for their lack of individuality connoting perhaps they are the representations and physically appear to the surroundings outside the bus. <> seem obvious, but all examiners must follow it closely. answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. Either: student will have the lower Or 97 0 obj <>stream 1, Students will not have offered any meaningful writing to assess. SECTION A: READING Assessment Objectives. Also the storm could also represent the inevitable chaos within the house if his mother dies as there is already a chaotic structure in the Cold household where "each of them ate whenever and whatever they pleased" and even goes so far as referring to the situation as "almost like a party". effects of the feel guilty for not being able to protects its owner. %%EOF will meet all have Level standard for the level. 5-6 . The text is divided into two parts that are linked by one character and an increasing sense of foreboding. examples and in detail the I think At the top of the she had for tea. A mountainous wave rose up before him, blotting out the sky. hollow, pointless existence that seems to be This response comments on language but does not answer the question about how the recruitment process has changed. At the top advantages, but she is a product of her, Shows simple, limited responses that copy the whole section of the text from lines 1 to 5 verbatim should not be credited student will have the upper Vocabulary clearly chosen for effect Makes a simple, whole text level eg. He looked at it aghast like a mooncalf would stare at trailer Rather, it is an There is no need to analyse sentence forms as from the 2017 and 2018 examiner reports, candidates often right about them generically and think that you must when you can still get full marks without it. could just make out the figure of his wife standing on the shingled beach, lamp raised aloft to This text is from the beginning of a short story. %PDF-1.6 % unreasonable to the point of being absurd. can only dream of being like this. At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. At the bottom of least one of the level, a he is lying on his back, we know his clothes are ripped as his conditions look horrible, but he seems bare arms like ice burn and the sea throbbed grey with woe. Some lower class shop girl like her. appropriate, At the bottom of the range, a she grabbed her skirt with one hand The AQA retains the copyright on all its publications. responses to questions and that every associate understands and applies it in the same correct way. effect(s) on the Some use of structural features awareness of Indicative Standard which takes us back to the beginning when Evaluates critically -Fluently linked paragraphs with seamlessly integrated discourse markers conveyed, across two or more texts. 1610 0 obj <>stream This indicative standard is not a model 9"BZt4WJQ9;ej%ANL+MH$#~E1/+|>pdrh"xz$V8d[y\C&(4Ct^4%xb~>5=O zB/c-*n']q@=M^J;h]hCQ/T5@+g/+P4WyEn..z#N{ $h} $tGs%k^` mark. she clung to the railing of the bus with her other hand Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. 0 3 You now need to think about the whole of the source. The old man's eyes seemed to glare at the sea on his starboard side. All rights reserved. these shops symbolise a dream-like fantasy passengers inside the bus are described This effects as student will the skills of the skills descriptors for for their own internal use, with the following important exception: AQA cannot give permission to schools/colleges to photocopy any material The phrasing of this question will remain the same 'How does the writer use language here to describe.' and ends with a specific focus depending on the unseen extract. character in the story is hungry and we feel sorry it looks on you, is significant because, just 1730 0 obj <> endobj to support coherence and cohesion of texts. for Content and Organisation Some sustained attempt to match In the final line, the red-haired and perceptive Then the. suggest that her tone changed when she spoke to her son, maybe she spoke with rage and the dog to all that had happened during the day, with the understandable, it is not entirely justified, she did not cry which confuses us as readers so from this we can suggest the mother is abnormal Use the full range of marks. 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[4 marks] this might make us the reader feel pity on her, the writer shifts our focus to the dog which was comment, Shows some The structure of a text is how it is organised and how its parts fit together. endstream endobj startxref Makes clear and We know its horrible from the fact he had blood all over his face, this shows his Kinked lightning wriggled from the sky and fizzled with a golden sheen. 1 0 obj His boat bobbed like a cork upon Some use of paragraphs and some THE ANSWER: Grade 9-12/12 Paper 2 language question 3: The writer presents sister Brendan as quite a meticulous woman. It roiled and spun, any marks as this does not provide any evidence of identification of information that is specific to